Comments on: Sticks and Stones http://www.awordwithyoupress.com/2010/07/30/sticks-and-stones/ Publishers and Purveyors of Fine Stories Sat, 04 Feb 2012 17:26:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Steve7k http://www.awordwithyoupress.com/2010/07/30/sticks-and-stones/comment-page-1/#comment-4007 Steve7k Sun, 01 Aug 2010 17:57:22 +0000 http://www.awordwithyoupress.com/?p=3586#comment-4007 A nice story that I think most of us who weren't the 'popular' ones in school can identify with. After all, where would Barbra Streisand be if she hadn't dropped the extra 'a' and had let them convince her she was an 'ugly duckling', or Bette Davis didn't think her 'bug eyes' would work on camera? Or that Harrison Ford had been told he'd never be anything other than a carpenter? Or JK Rowling had believed her first rejection letter? If you don't mind a little constructive criticism, there are a couple of typos and errors that could have been picked up. You talk about Bobbi Rae and Bobbi and sometimes Bobbie. I think it would be stronger to have just the one name/spelling used throughout (and if word count is a problem you can always hyphenate!) You have a 'think' where it should be 'thick', and a comma splice at the end of the second paragraph. I'm only pointing these out to be helpful; I don't do damning of anyone's writing. If I really didn't like something I'd stay quiet! Not that anyone I haven't responded to or commented on should read anything into that, he said, trying to backtrack quickly!<br><br>Best of luck<br>Steve A nice story that I think most of us who weren't the 'popular' ones in school can identify with. After all, where would Barbra Streisand be if she hadn't dropped the extra 'a' and had let them convince her she was an 'ugly duckling', or Bette Davis didn't think her 'bug eyes' would work on camera? Or that Harrison Ford had been told he'd never be anything other than a carpenter? Or JK Rowling had believed her first rejection letter? If you don't mind a little constructive criticism, there are a couple of typos and errors that could have been picked up. You talk about Bobbi Rae and Bobbi and sometimes Bobbie. I think it would be stronger to have just the one name/spelling used throughout (and if word count is a problem you can always hyphenate!) You have a 'think' where it should be 'thick', and a comma splice at the end of the second paragraph. I'm only pointing these out to be helpful; I don't do damning of anyone's writing. If I really didn't like something I'd stay quiet! Not that anyone I haven't responded to or commented on should read anything into that, he said, trying to backtrack quickly!

Best of luck
Steve

]]> By: Suzanne http://www.awordwithyoupress.com/2010/07/30/sticks-and-stones/comment-page-1/#comment-3979 Suzanne Sat, 31 Jul 2010 12:37:50 +0000 http://www.awordwithyoupress.com/?p=3586#comment-3979 A narrative piece that gives me, the reader, a glimpse into what it is like to be a new person acclimating to a new small town, all those idiosyncracies. It took me back to high schoo. A narrative piece that gives me, the reader, a glimpse into what it is like to be a new person acclimating to a new small town, all those idiosyncracies. It took me back to high schoo.

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